Tuesday, March 27, 2012

If I had a million dollars to make a change, I would . . .

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20 comments:

  1. IF I HAD A MILLON DOLLARS….

    I WILL GO TO THE HOMELESS AND GIVE THE ABOUT 200 DOLLARS,
    SO,THEY CAN GET A JOB , NEW LIFE,NEW FAMILY,AND MAKE MONEY ON THEIR OWN






    ARIEL W.
    MS.THOMES 5th

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    1. i meant to say this

      I would make mats for the homeless, make everyone have their own choices at lunch, and make the world a better place.


      by ariel winston

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  2. if i had a million dollars i would
    give to the homeless so they can have a better life
    donate to people that need it
    share with my family
    help people that need somewhere to live
    that's what i would do with a million dollars


    SALENIA MILLER
    MRS.THOMAS 5TH GRADE

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  3. if i had a million dollars i would help the homeless people with a car,food,house then i would help my family with some money


    MICHAEL HILL
    Mrs.Fields 3 grade

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    1. If I had million dollors i would give the homeless my money and help them to get a job,clothes, and a house and espicially a car!!!


      Terrell.Williams
      Mrs.Fields

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  4. if i had a million dollars i would help homeless people get a job,car,house, and food and donate money to help charity and sick animals.

    Hiro Givens
    Mrs.Fields3rd grade

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  5. If I a millon dollars I would help sick people and homeless and help my family. Braedon Miller Mrs.Fields3rd grade

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    1. Breadon, I will........
      - give the money
      - and the homeless have food
      - save the money the homeless will have a job
      - have full of money buy a giant house
      - buy a really really sweet looking car
      - and the homeless will have insurence
      - and make the homeless have children
      - and get old the children are grown ups
      - and the homeless will die and the children will pay for the caskets.THE END!

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  6. If i had a million dollar's i would help homeless people because i would give the communtie inything they want.But i will give my country money to put in bank and that's why i wold help the whole word

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  7. If I had a millon dollars I would?

    .give money to charites
    .feed the hungry
    .give homes to the homeless

    JOEY
    MS.Vanpatter


    Joey
    MS.VanPatter

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    1. If I had a million dollars I would by stuff I want.Also give the rest of my money to homless. By Kaneil.Morrison

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  8. If i had million dollors i would make a change, like
    - give the homeless money
    - the homeless would have money and get a job
    - then they can get their own money and get a house and get a car
    -and they could have children
    -and the children will grow up
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    1. hey, Terrell do you have million dollors to if you do I wood love you for you to come to the movies with me.

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    2. Well not really but, i have enough money to go to the movies

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  9. Hi, everybody if i had million dollors i would give the homeless money and they can get their nown job and they can get their own money and have a house and have a car and have a great life
    END

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    1. hey, Arion do you really have a million dollors because give it to the homeless!

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  10. Arion, I will give the homeless all of my money and everything and the worlds money

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  11. Terrell WilliamsMay 8, 2012 at 2:06 PM

    If i had million dollars i would give the money to all the people in all the world. and they can go the the movies and see movies in 3D

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  12. I had a dream that I was rich and famous and I gave the homeless money and that was how I was famous and they called me the money giver and I had my own parade

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  13. If I had a million dollars I would give $1,000 on charity and the rest for homeless.

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